Darkender

I didn't like it because it completely destroyed my view of Batman as a badass. He was getting beat down the whole movie! I understand that the hero must rise from the ashes but, as someone pointed out, he didn't even take out Bane himself! It was ridiculous. The movie was alright, but it was too hyped up. The previous movie was better.

That movie ruined my childhood! *Spoiler Alert* Jk. My only real complaint is how he was weak and He got beat up for most of the movie. It was alright. Just a little too long for my taste. I was ready to go about halfway through. Midnight showings just may not be my thing. Then, to top it all off, I got a ticket on the way home. So, it kinda put a damper on the movie for me.

Word limit or not, if you plan on writing a novella please be prepared to be judged accordingly. In other words, you better be able to keep me entertained.

ThePhenomenalOne- 4 Challenge Requirement- 4 Confrontation- 4 Grammar- 5 Entertainment- 3 Style- 4 It was good. You captured the characters pretty well, and my only problem was some of Peter's vocabulary. He said some things that seemed out of his scope/range. All and all however I thought it fit the challenge well and was a good read. I_Know_All- 3.8 Challenge: 4 Confrontation: 4 Grammar: 3 Entertainment: 4 Style: 4 I didn't know the characters THAT well so I can't say if this is plausible or not but as far as the writing goes, it was good. There were a couple mistakes that really messed up the flow of the story but other than that it was a good read. Lunacyde- 4.6 Challenge: 4 Confrontation: 5 Grammar: 4 Entertainment: 5 Style: 5 Very nice. I love the Avatar series and you really did them justice in this set up. The story was descriptive and the dialogue was great. The only problem was a couple missing words and commas that could have been added to strengthen the flow of the story. Also, while I felt you met the challenge, I didn't feel right giving you a 5. I felt this fight was more of a disagreement than one character straight up betraying the other. However, I could see how the characters could feel betrayed. Still, very nice. JohnnyChany- 4.9 Challenge: 5 Confrontation: 5 Grammar:4.5 Entertainment:5 Style:5 Bravo good sir. What can I say? It was great. Original, emotional, nostalgic. It had it all. My only fault was a missing "do" early on but other than that, just great. Redemption X: 4.2 Challenge:5 Confrontation:4 Grammar:5 Entertainment:3 Style:3 I'm not even sure what you added from this "Universe Beta" of yours but I do know that Hit Girl and Big Daddy's characterization was a bit off. This is especially true if you used the movie versions. (More so Hit Girl than Daddy) However, the writing was still pretty good with no errors that to trip up the flow of the story as far as I could tell. Dr. Pymp: 3.5 Challenge:5 Confrontation:4 Grammar:2.5 Entertainment:3 Style:3 I don't remember much about Dragon ball Z but I would think someone writing a set up for it should at least know how to spell the important words. A simple trip to google would have earned you a significantly higher average. You should also really reread your set up before you post. Doom: 4.6 Challenge:4 Confrontation:4 Grammar:5 Entertainment:5 Style:5 I've never seen the show but now I'm quite intrigued. The set up was simple and well written. It was entertaining enough to keep someone, even someone without the slightest clue what's going on, reading. BigBallerJu: 4.4 Challenge:5 Confrontation:4 Grammar:4 Entertainment:4 Style:5 Good stuff. Creative idea combined with good writing leads to a good grade. Kibax: 3.5 Challenge: - Confrontation: 3 Grammar: 4 Entertainment: 3 Style: 4 I didn't see the betrayal here. It may be because I know little to nothing of these characters, however. Was it the kiss that was mentioned? I'll most likely curve this grade. Corvette: 4.6 Challenge:4 Confrontation:5 Grammar:5 Entertainment:4 Style:5 Peypey...: 4.4 Challenge: 5 Confrontation: 4 Grammar: 3 Entertainment: 5 Style: 5 What a refreshing match. The writing was superb despite a couple mistakes and it left more for the reader to think about other than "feats". This is the type of creativity that I like to see and that will most definitely flourish in the CBUB Challenges. Excellent Job.

*vulgarity* you Lebron! #LakerGangOrDie ...Congrats to Miami though haha

Finally! A fight with characters I actually know pretty well. I look forward to reading it as I've been on my Legend of Korra fix and I see you have been too.

This guy is great. This is some good fiction. I highly reccomend.

I will have to side against the use of this Universe Beta. It really, to me, is a cheat for the challenge and opens up the door for more loopholes in later challenges. It forces relationships that aren't canon and that nobody other than the creator will really know or be able to judge. If you want to create your own world with all sorts of different characters, that's what the FPL is for. While it's true that it is a bit of a restriction on creativity that's what makes it a "Challenge".

Okay, I stopped reading after you said you created this universe. I'm not sure about the other judges thoughts, but since this is a CBUB tournament I assume that none of the characters are allowed to be originally yours. I'm not sure what you have planned for your submission but I'll just remind you that this is a CBUB tournament and you do not use original characters for this. You will most likely be judged on characterization also, so I'd stick to what the characters actually do and say. I'll leave it Treach to say whether this Universe Beta thing you created is actually allowed.

While it's nice you explained what Universe Beta was (Cause I really had no idea), I think he meant that in the set up it must be explained. For this challenge we expect a little more from the writers' set ups which means you may need to add backstory to your fight if you want the judges that are reading to better understand what is going on. This will lead to a better grade. I'm still not entirely sure what Universe Beta is but I have nothing against it as long as it's a real thing.

Keep the dream alive!

Unless, of course, he slips into a puddle of oil.

Square Pickle- Challenge Requirement- 5 Confrontation- 3 Grammar-2 Entertainment-2 Style-2 While you met the challenge, I found the set up to be odd and quite out of character for all of the characters. Zeus is desperate enough to reunleash a monster that dangerous? Your grammar was also lacking. With the time you guys had for this I expect you to at least read it over. I can understand a couple but you had quite a few. Score: 2.8 Bigballerju Challenge Requirement-5 Confrontation-4 Grammar-3 Entertainment-4 Style-3 A good idea. The story was well written and met the challenge nicely. The only thing that detracts from the story is a lot of grammar mistakes. I also hate the play style of writing where the colon represents when a character is talking. Other than that, it was really good. Score: 3.8 JohnnyChany Challenge Requirement-5 Confrontation-5 Grammar-4 Entertainment-5 Style-4 Very nice. The whole set up built up the story well and convinced me both characters had switched roles. There were a couple grammar mistakes but none too detrimental to the flow of the story. Good job, once again. Megarock8 Challenge Requirement-2 Confrontation-1 Grammar-2 Entertainment-1 Style-1 Not much to say here. Brainwashing was mentioned earlier as not recommended for this challenge. Your writing needs work. Keep at it. Confession FTP Challenge Requirement-5 Confrontation-4 Grammar-5 Entertainment-5 Style-5 Very Nice. A good read all the way and you met the challenge as far as I can tell. ScrewAttackFan Challenge Requirement-3 Confrontation-2 Grammar-4 Entertainment-3 Style-3 To be honest, I was turned off once I read someone's mind was erased. It was too close to mind control for me. Also, Weskers transformation seemed abrupt and the reasoning for it was rather weak. Over all it was Okay. LoneWolf Challenge Requirement- 4 Confrontation-4 Grammar-4 Entertainment-5 Style-5 Wow. That was great. While at first I was skeptical of Spiderman giving up his son for Ben, the writing really made up for it. Just awesome. However, I was the judge that wished to ban traditional match ups in the first place which is why you didn't receive a 5. Also, the way you arranged them to meet seemed like a cop out to me. (Or maybe I just wanted to read more?) I saw a couple mistakes but overall it was still quite good.

My Lakers! My poor, poor Lakers! We were so close! (Not really) If only everybody came to play and not only Kobe. Yeah, I hope Gasol gets traded. I hope the Spurs get in the Thunders ass! #LakerGang #DownWithTheHeat

I actually came up with an idea for this. I might just write it up for funnsies or an example.

I have to admit I was a little skeptical during that Iron Man and Thor fight. Like, really? But I got over it quickly, I think all the team members had their time to shine in the movie, but Hulk and Iron Man stole the show in the end.

Interesting ....

How is First Class better than Avengers? I really don't see how. Avengers, though it had a slow start, was much more captivating. It had way more action, which I value in superhero movies, and still represented the characters well.

I could help with that.

Ah, thanks for the PM' guys those little clues definitely passed me by.

Avengers was the best movie I'd seen in a while. It had everything I needed from it. I was definitely geeking out in the theaters. I do have one question that someone can answer in pm if they don't want to spoil it for others. Who was the Gug they showed after the credits?

I'm feeling it, Treach.

I've never respected you more, sir.