Signature

[Guest mollyhayes01]

Name:Signature

 

Physical description: blonde hair, blue eyes, 5'10'', 160 lbs, suprisingly big breast (said to be bigger than powergirls)

 

Powers:

Energy absorbtion: Signature has shown to be ability to absorb any type of energy from electrical to cosmic.She has shown too have absorbed the energy of a warhead and only reach 50% of her max.She can hold on to energy how ever long she wills her self to. she has been shown to be able to redirect this energy in blast, solid contructs, etc. She reached her max when she absorbed the energy of a exploding planet.

 

Energy Redirection: Signature has the ability to rediret the energy shes absorbed and can use it in anyway she pleases she has also showed the ability to manipulate enrgy with fine control.She has been shown almost indestructible when in max power taking hits from the most powerful people.She is also able to project this energy into planet destroying blast.Here are some examples of the way shes used this power....

 

Force field generation: has shown to make even god proof sheilds

 

Plasma bolts:Can create powerful bolts of plasma capable of slicing steel in 2 and not losing momentum

 

Energy beams: can create beams of pure energy

 

Optic blast: can create powerful optic beams she generates from her eyes

 

solar explosions: can create a orb of solar energy capable of lighting half the planet from space

 

electrical supply: can operate machines and other electrical appliances

 

cosmic control: can control cosmic energy to the point where she can take she can incenerate a planet from removing the cosmic barrier

 

Flight: can fly at speeds so fast she can tear right through planets and fly unaided in the vaccum space when her energys at max she can fly so fast she causes a rift in the time space continum

 

Super durability: can withstand powerful impact without injury and uses this to her advantage when her energy is at max she is invulnerable to harm.

 

Super strength:can lift up to 2 tons but the more energy she absorbs the more she can lift at her max she can lift over 2,000 tons with ease.

 

Super speed: Signature can run at speed that challenge even the flash she is definitly the fastest women alive

 

Energy signature absorbtion: Signature can absorb the energy signature of a person to tire them or feed them energy to give them more energy or give them a heart attack. when she absorbs the energy signature of a meta-human or mutant she can use their abilities for a short period of time. she only gets a fraction of there abilitys and control so she rarely uses this.

 

Hand to Hand combat: Signature has trained and mastered karate, capoeria, ninjitsu, shao lin kung fu, she quan, and eagle claw.she can mix the forms of martial arts together to form an all new fighting style called her Signature mix up. She loves to fight and once shes started a fight its hard to stop her.

[Guest Houdinimachine]

I call troll.

[Guest Ivan]

Not a troll, but completely confused about what makes an interesting character.

 

Dear MollyHayes. Please take ALL of the powers and skills out of your character and rewrite it. As it exists now, you are godmoding and nobody will want to deal with you.

[Guest Houdinimachine]

Not a troll, but completely confused about what makes an interesting character.

 

Dear MollyHayes. Please take ALL of the powers and skills out of your character and rewrite it. As it exists now, you are godmoding and nobody will want to deal with you.

 

You have too much faith in humanity.

[Guest mollyhayes01]

Not a troll, but completely confused about what makes an interesting character.

 

Dear MollyHayes. Please take ALL of the powers and skills out of your character and rewrite it. As it exists now, you are godmoding and nobody will want to deal with you.

I don't want to change it she's like a female galactus

[treacherous]

Then I hope you write a really, really, really good story to support that, because if not...well, you'll see.

[Guest mollyhayes01]

Then I hope you write a really, really, really good story to support that, because if not...well, you'll see.

what's gonna happen please tell me please

[treacherous]

Nothing major. Many, many...many losses. Plus characters don't die in the new FPL, so many, many more losses.

[Guest mollyhayes01]

Nothing major. Many, many...many losses. Plus characters don't die in the new FPL, so many, many more losses.

dang

[Guest ThePoet]

First off, read some of the FAQs, character creation guidelines. You'll start off with a street lvl character that gets a certain amount of points to spend on powers. Right now you're spending at least ten times the amount of that initial point allotment.

 

The more powers a character has around here, the better the writing has to be. We don't go for the Superman/Sentry/galactus types that do anything at the drop of a hat. We go for Spiderman/Batman/Fantastic Four type. Yes they're above normal human capabilities, but they're still human. They can't do it all. Maybe they work with a team that is greater than the sum of each individual. The FPL doesn't care about powers very much, it cares about backstory, character development, writing style, grammar, language mastery, conventions, and lots of other literary devices.

 

So you'd better have some good writing chops, otherwise your uber-powerful character will get her ass handed to her repeatedly by Landon, Ivan, me, Rhek, Treach, and Soberguy to name a few. Mostly me though, I feel the need to stroke my own ego at the moment.

 

-ThePoet

[Guest mollyhayes01]

First off, read some of the FAQs, character creation guidelines. You'll start off with a street lvl character that gets a certain amount of points to spend on powers. Right now you're spending at least ten times the amount of that initial point allotment.

 

The more powers a character has around here, the better the writing has to be. We don't go for the Superman/Sentry/galactus types that do anything at the drop of a hat. We go for Spiderman/Batman/Fantastic Four type. Yes they're above normal human capabilities, but they're still human. They can't do it all. Maybe they work with a team that is greater than the sum of each individual. The FPL doesn't care about powers very much, it cares about backstory, character development, writing style, grammar, language mastery, conventions, and lots of other literary devices.

 

So you'd better have some good writing chops, otherwise your uber-powerful character will get her ass handed to her repeatedly by Landon, Ivan, me, Rhek, Treach, and Soberguy to name a few. Mostly me though, I feel the need to stroke my own ego at the moment.

 

-ThePoet

im pretty sure my character would murder yours

[treacherous]

You've got so much to learn, young padawan.

[Guest mollyhayes01]

You've got so much to learn, young padawan.

what the hells a padawan

[Landon]

This isn't a character.

 

This is a list of powers.

 

Either A) stop trolling, since you posted this immediately after you started your inane Lady Galaga thread, or come back when you have more to show us than a laundry list of super powers from your favorite super heroes.

 

shutup i dont wanna talk to you stop saying smart things or ill somethingsomething please dont ban me Ivan

 

Throwing that out there so you don't have to actually spend 10 seconds responding to my post. Did it for you.

[Guest mollyhayes01]

This isn't a character.

 

This is a list of powers.

 

Either A) stop trolling, since you posted this immediately after you started your inane Lady Galaga thread, or come back when you have more to show us than a laundry list of super powers from your favorite super heroes.

 

 

 

Throwing that out there so you don't have to actually spend 10 seconds responding to my post. Did it for you.

whatever

[Guest Houdinimachine]

I still call troll.

[Guest Ivan]

Ok, I'll play. If nothing else, we can save this for posterity. My made-up examples tend to trend toward the ridiculous anyway, and it doesn't get more ridiculous than Signature by Mollyhayes01. Please understand Molly while it may seem like this is addressed to you, I have decided that you are, in fact a troll and am answering this simply so we can use your post as an example of what NOT to do.

 

 

Name:Signature

 

Physical description: blonde hair, blue eyes, 5'10'', 160 lbs, suprisingly big breast (said to be bigger than powergirls)

 

Right off the bat you're either a troll or another vina, and I'm not sure which is worse. I have no problems with the name, but the physical description has more in common with Jack Cole's work in Playboy than it does Jack Cole's work with DC Comics. Such specific focus on this sort of titillating detail adds nothing to the character and helps reinforce the stereotype that female types in fiction are really only good for one thing. So either you're an insensitive jackoff masquerading as a lady on the forums, or you're willfully trying to set your own gender back a few decades. Either way, it is clear why these folks want nothing to do with you. As a secondary aside, it is never a good idea to namedrop existing characters who belong in other universes.

 

Powers:

Energy absorbtion: Signature has shown to be ability to absorb any type of energy from electrical to cosmic.She has shown too have absorbed the energy of a warhead and only reach 50% of her max.She can hold on to energy how ever long she wills her self to. she has been shown to be able to redirect this energy in blast, solid contructs, etc. She reached her max when she absorbed the energy of a exploding planet.

 

Energy Redirection: Signature has the ability to rediret the energy shes absorbed and can use it in anyway she pleases she has also showed the ability to manipulate enrgy with fine control.She has been shown almost indestructible when in max power taking hits from the most powerful people.She is also able to project this energy into planet destroying blast.Here are some examples of the way shes used this power....

 

Force field generation: has shown to make even god proof sheilds

Plasma bolts:Can create powerful bolts of plasma capable of slicing steel in 2 and not losing momentum

Energy beams: can create beams of pure energy

Optic blast: can create powerful optic beams she generates from her eyes

solar explosions: can create a orb of solar energy capable of lighting half the planet from space

electrical supply: can operate machines and other electrical appliances

 

Welcome to the FPL, where the words "god-proof" are both laughably stupid and a terrible idea. Nothing is god-proof to an experienced god. Making your character immune to any kind of attack means she will never ever have any challenges and, by inference, will never be interesting. But no, boys and girls, we're not done yet, because this character also claims same lame "shoot energy" power four times in a row. Although the last one possibly has some potentially interesting applications in the Dragonball Z universe, here in Khazan this is just repetition for the point of being a jerk. Perhaps it is time to explain something. The FPL is a popularity contest. Why would anyone want to read about (and by logical extension, vote for) a character that doesn't work in any kind of storytelling context because nothing is difficult for it to overcome?

Ok lets start with the obvious. There is some discussion in modern grammar whether one or two spaces follow a period, but conventional wisdom is that zero is never a good idea. Learn the difference between "to" and "too." Traditionally "Herself" is one word, and most sentences start with capital letters. You can't separate a single idea with commas as though it were a list. The word "exploding" starts with a vowel, so you should use "an" instead of "a."

 

Whew. Ok, now let's focus on the power itself. The game rules state that such a high level of energy absorption would make it your character's only power. The power level also fluctuates wildly... fifty percent of maximum power is an absorbed "warhead," (presumably from some kind of missile,) so double that and you get... an exploding planet? I'm sorry, are you suggesting that two of these warheads, detonated simultaneously, would be sufficient to overcome the necessary gravitational force of an entire planet?

 

At this point I still really don't object to the power, since she could single handedly take on the Death Star, but would lose to someone with a knife. That's fair, every character needs a few glaring weaknesses. Unfortunately, as you'll soon see, you replace those character-defining weaknesses with truckloads of nonsensical crap.

 

Once again, please Learn to Spell if you're going to write here. Making this tiny, cartoon-boobed blonde bimbo into an indestructible powerhouse is the kind of mistake a rookie might make, but also giving her the ability to destroy planets? Why does she need this power? How can you possibly imagine this ability coming in handy? Oh, look. You gave her more powers.

 

That electrical supply power is my real problem here. This one ability, by itself, would make an awesome, interesting, and insanely powerful character. In this day and age when everything is run by computers and machines you could fashion yourself into a small god. However, what the hell does this character need electrical appliances for? Huh? HUH? Umm.. moving on.

 

cosmic control: can control cosmic energy to the point where she can take she can incenerate a planet from removing the cosmic barrier

Flight: can fly at speeds so fast she can tear right through planets and fly unaided in the vaccum space when her energys at max she can fly so fast she causes a rift in the time space continum

Super durability: can withstand powerful impact without injury and uses this to her advantage when her energy is at max she is invulnerable to harm.

Super strength:can lift up to 2 tons but the more energy she absorbs the more she can lift at her max she can lift over 2,000 tons with ease.

Super speed: Signature can run at speed that challenge even the flash she is definitly the fastest women alive

 

Wow. Ok, yeah, troll. Can't believe I ever doubted.

First of all, what the heck is a cosmic barrier? I'm not against totally making up science, but you need to throw us a bone and pretend to explain it. The flight power, which exceed superluminal and marches boldly into "Ludicrous Speed!" territory, is well over the point limit all by itself, and also cripples your ability to send this character on any kind of meaningful journey. Super strength and durability are far and away the most overused powers of all time. By the way the Super Speed description is, again, needlessly repetitive since she can FLY faster than she can run, and she's already blown up half a dozen planets in the character description, not leaving her a whole lot of places left to run anyway. You also namedropped again, which I will remind you is a no-no.

 

Energy signature absorbtion: Signature can absorb the energy signature of a person to tire them or feed them energy to give them more energy or give them a heart attack. when she absorbs the energy signature of a meta-human or mutant she can use their abilities for a short period of time. she only gets a fraction of there abilitys and control so she rarely uses this.

 

Of all the terrible crap that came out of comics in the nineties, former External and X-Villain Gideon is my own private guilty pleasure. I've always been fond of the Amazo-esque power of, essentially, power theft. Having said that, it makes no sense here, and of all the places you could've elected to show restraint, this is the strangest place to invoke sudden limitations. Given the nature of this character's powers, she's not the subtle type, so the first application of the power is again pointless. She just blew up four planets in a row, and now she's stopping to give a single individual a heart attack?

 

Hand to Hand combat: Signature has trained and mastered karate, capoeria, ninjitsu, shao lin kung fu, she quan, and eagle claw.she can mix the forms of martial arts together to form an all new fighting style called her Signature mix up. She loves to fight and once shes started a fight its hard to stop her.

 

This last part makes absolutely no sense. I'm not talking about the Phantom Stranger occasionally throwing a punch to catch his cosmic opponents off guard, I'm talking about giving this she-Cheater martial abilities. Why would a completely invunlerable character who can ALSO make god-proof forcefields AND toss around battleships with her super strength ever bother to learn a single martial arts maneuver?

 

Hilariously, after all of the time you wasted giving her tons of stupid, redundant, and uninteresting powers, she could still get taken out by any mentalist.

 

So what have we learned to day, kids? The most important thing you can take away from this is that the FPL is a character popularity contest. Hordes of godlike abilities don't make a character interesting or likeable, otherwise the In-Betweener would appear in more comics than Spiderman each month. You make your characters good by making them flawed, real people and not by adding spades of stupid superpowers. Go watch Die Hard and imagine how dumb that movie would be if John McClane was replaced with Galactus.

[Guest ThePoet]

Bonus points for Ivan and a Die Hard reference. I'm also throwing a single point to molly, but it will fly right over her head just like everything else.

 

-ThePoet

[Guest Artemis Entreri]

Wow! And I thought you guys smashed my character......Oh and guys why don't let Molly know what you really think! LOL

[Sir Exal]

The most important thing you can take away from this is that the FPL is a character popularity contest. Hordes of godlike abilities don't make a character interesting or likeable, otherwise the In-Betweener would appear in more comics than Spiderman each month. You make your characters good by making them flawed, real people and not by adding spades of stupid superpowers.

 

Quoted for emphasis.

[Guest mollyhayes01]

yay I am gonna be used as an example or troll thingy whatever but still yay

[treacherous]

...and an extremely great example you were. Your character and Ivan's breakdown should be posted on the FPLwiki for Posterity...padawan.

[Guest mollyhayes01]

...and an extremely great example you were. Your character and Ivan's breakdown should be posted on the FPLwiki for Posterity...padawan.

Im honored and if you dont mind me asking what the hells a padawan.

[Landon]

Padawan isn't fitting. Not in the least bit. Womp Rat, though? Yes.

 

[treacherous]

Consider yourself nerdschooled Wompy.